One Flat Note

This short movie has loads wrong with it but good point too. It was shot in two days and the flower shop and cafe are not next to each other in the real world. The shot of the two guys looking at the car and then going into the cafe was shot ten days before the shot of them entering the cafe.

What do you think? What is bad, good, something you'd do differently? A great way to look at movie making is to analyze existing movies.